托福独立写作的三大提分点

托福独立写作的三大提分点，这就是高分的秘籍,快来一起学习学习吧，下面小编就和大家分享，来欣赏一下吧。

托福独立写作的三大提分点

对于写作，想必大家或多或少都会有一些问题，今天，上海新航道托福培训小编为大家总结了托福独立写作的三大提分点，并为大家解答一些问题。

1.是不是字数越多，高分越有保证?

是的。因为托福写作，主要考察考生在多大程度上，能就一个话题有效展开。一般来说，如果写的越多，意味着考生对某一个话题的认识越深;也能从侧面反映考生的知识面很广、英文词句储备很大。

另外，500+的数字，能够冲淡你作文中的语言硬伤(拼写错误、语法错误等)。因为考官往往会假定，由于你表达的东西太多，而来不及检查错误，从而对你网开一面。

比如，很多新航道的线下课学生，每次批改作业都是语言错误不断(尴尬的中式表达、顽固的语法错误等等)但最终都能拿到28+。如果非要归纳共同点的话，那就是这类学生，往往在出考场后都会很兴奋地微信我说，老师老师，今天考了很熟悉的话题，所以很有的写!

最后的最后，记住：“字数多、分数高”这一铁律建立在一个重要的前提下，那就是：你多出来的话必须要“扣题”和“言之有物”。字数多的文章表面上是赢在字数，然而实际起作用的是：海量的有效信息。

2.需不需准备名人名例?

比如贝多芬、罗斯福、孔子……

在绝大部分情况下，我的答案都是“不!需!要!”

因为ETS在OG中已经说的很清楚了，“exemplification(例证)”的好坏完全取决于，你所举的例子能够有效地支持前面的分论点和道理。

所以，只要能够恰到好处地支持前面的道理，例子本身不分贵贱。比如：父母是否应该严格管教孩子?

第一种举例方式：你可以拿贝多芬说事。因为贝多芬父亲对他的管教很严。“贝多芬在童年练琴时稍有懈怠，便是一顿暴打。父亲的教育方式虽然严苛，但也为贝多芬后期作曲事业的腾飞打下了坚实基础。”不过这个例子，也可以被自己随便编的例子完美替换。

所以第二个的例子可以这么编：有一个人，这个人可以是你表哥、也可以是你邻居Jack，都无所谓。例子的正文可以说，“Jack是你们小区里的钢琴神童，年纪虽小，但钢琴造诣极高。但你知道，Jack之所以能取得今天的成就，就是因为父亲对他的管教极严。每天督促他学习，为他的钢琴技巧打下了坚实基础。”虽然后面这个例子一看就知道是编的，但其实无所谓。因为考官只看你的例子是否符合常识、以及能否支持前面的观点。

最后，倒是有一种特例，我会鼓励学生使用名人名例。当这些名例考生已经烂熟于心了，比如有的考生刚刚考完GRE，为Issue准备了好几个名人名例。如果他们想把这些例子直接搬上托福考场，只要符合“扣题”的前提，我双手赞成。

3.需要不要模版?

不需要用“模版”，但需要有“模版意识”。

先解释为什么要有“模版意识”。因为一般来说，模版都会涵盖三个部分：开头、中间三段、结尾。而每一个中间段又会被进一步分为：分论点，道理，例子。这些部分，都是得分点，缺一不可。建立“模版意识”会保证我们不会因为缺失成分而丢分。

再说为什么不需要用“模版”。其实托福写作界各路前辈，都已经用亲身例子来反复论证过，“用模版既不加分也不扣分”。唯一的优势，可能就是：扩充字数，最多50字。所以说，这种做法最多是给那个“无话可说”的你买一个心安、聊以慰籍罢了。

相反，不如稍微花一两个小时，学习怎样把分论点讲简单、讲丰富的技巧。比如，笔者从美国研究生院习得的“桥梁概念” 就特别适用于托福独立写作(包括GRE的Issue)，这套方法论的精髓就是，能把任何一个观点拆成8句话。既可以把事情说的更清晰缜密，客观上也起到了扩充字数的作用。相较于背模版、使用模版，这是一个更务实、好处更多的选择。

最后，祝各位考生都能取得理想的成绩!

2020.1.11托福综合写作参考范文

今天上海新航道托福培训班为大家带来的是2020.1.11托福综合写作参考范文!

本题是重复2017年12月16日真题，如何保护蝙蝠不被风力涡轮机伤害

阅读：

1，蝙蝠每年迁徙的路线是固定的，所以只要把风力涡轮机建在远离迁徙路线的地方即可;2，风力涡轮机只在白天工作，如此一来，夜间活动的蝙蝠便不会受到影响;3，使用雷达电波驱赶蝙蝠。事实表明，蝙蝠一般不在有雷达颠簸的地方活动。

听力：1， 风力涡轮机的选址比较特殊，需要在山脊才有足够的风发电，但山脊正好在蝙蝠迁飞的路线上。如果伴奏，可能会影响涡轮机的效果;2， 蝙蝠晚上活动白天休息，蝙蝠会选址比较高的建筑结构休息，比如风力涡轮机。如果让涡轮白天工作，可能对休息的蝙蝠产生影响;3，蝙蝠之所以远离雷达，是因为雷达颠簸会破坏它们的生殖系统。如果采用雷达电波驱赶，这会带来伤害，从而使数量更少。

话题分类：生物/技术类

参考范文：

The reading passage and the lecture debate on the solutions to save bats from being harmed by wind turbine. The reading passage proposes three solutions, which are all contradicted by the following lecture.

The first solution is to construct wind turbine at places not interfering with bats’ migratory patterns. Scientists could study the patterns, and then guide power companies to build turbines not in the paths of the bats' migrations. However, the lecturer finds this impractical because wind turbines have to be built where there is plenty of wind to spin the turbine. But that’s exactly where bats are most likely to migrate as they follow mountain ridges. The wind speed will be too slow to spin the turbines if they are built outside of bats’ migration paths, for example flat plains.

The second solution is to shut down the current wind turbines at night, so that the blades of the wind turbines will not harm the bats flying though the area. But the lecture opposes, contending that bats have to sleep when the night is almost over, often on the wind turbines. When the wind turbines are turned back on during the day the bats will still be harmed.

The last solution, according to the reading, is to use radar to keep bats away from the turbines. It is because bats can detect the waves emitted by radar, and they will stay away from it. Yet the lecture finds this a bad idea as radar waves can harm the bats’ reproductive organs. Once they get in touch with the wave, their reproductive system will be permanently injured and this will further reduce bat’s population.

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2019年6月15日托福综合写作解析及参考范文

阅读：Wildlife Crossings 的可行性

1. 野生动物不熟悉，没有办法用

2. 花费太大

3. 阻碍生物数量和繁殖能力，因为只有一小片区域可以活动

听力：反驳

1，刚开始的第一年确实不行不会用，但是野生动物的适应能力很强的，所以后面几年使用会大幅度增长。

2，对于人来说比较危险，动物横穿马路造成人们受伤，一年会有很多起，花费的钱更多。

3，roads限制了生物的活动区域，crossing帮助他们客服这个困难，这样就可以任意活动，从而位置healthy population。

话题分类：动物学

2019年6月15日托福综合写作解题思路：

阅读部分仔细看，很多时候能够给我们一些听力内容方面的提示。

听力的细节一定尽可能的给全。

2019年6月15日托福综合写作参考范文

Both reading and listening deal with the same topic about the possibility of crossings. However, their perspectives are different. According to the reading, crossing sare not a good way for wildlife animals, while the professor in the listening casts doubt on the writer’s argument.

First, the reading points out animals are unfamiliar with the crossings so that they don’t know how to use it. However, in the lecture, the professor mentions that it won’t work for the first year for sure. For animals, they need more time, like 10 years, but their adaptation is strong. So in the following years, the using of crossings will increase greatly.

In addition, the writer contends that building crossings costs a lot. On the contrary, the professor holds the idea that otherwise it’s actually dangerous for human. He states that thousands of people get damaged and cost millions of dollars to fix that. Building crossings can effectively avoid it. So crossing is not only benefit animals, but also is additional merits for human.

The last point of there ading illustrates that in developed area, the habits of wildlife get damaged and fragmentation is not good for their hunting food and reproduction. In contrast, the professor refuses to accept the writer’s idea by asserting the crossing can in fact, connect different areas, animals pass through anywhere freely and easily. So they can maintain a healthy population with the crossings.

2019年6月15日托福独立写作解析及参考范文

话题分类：工作

2019年6月15日托福独立写作解题思路：

禁止之后会减少员工不满意度：

1，非工作时间的邮件会很大程度干扰员工休息，进而影响效率

2，消磨员工的积极性和工作热情

3，员工会有被尊重和被理解的感受

不会减少员工的不满意程度：

1，对工作内容本身，比如创新性，挑战性，喜爱程度等不满意，无法被抵消

2，工作环境(办公环境和人际关系)是更影响满意程度的部分

3，如果周末接收邮件需要工作能够得到足够的认可或者奖励，也是可以接受的。

2019年6月15日托福独立写作参考范文：

For corporations, it’s fairly reasonable to provide a working environment that all workers have fewer complaints about. Some of them have planed prohibiting sending emails to the employees at weekends, thought it will alleviate their discontent towards their workplace. But some strong believers are inclined to the fact that even receiving no tasks in their leisure time, employees will not easily change their attitude to the company. Accordingly, I with no hesitation, advocate that declining disturbance toworkers’ personal life such as their holidays from company can greatly improve their satisfactory of the firm.

For starters, everyone needs to have a rest while constant assignments will finally eliminate their passion to work. Specifically, most people, indeed, enjoy doing their jobs with high level of satisfaction, but this only happens when they are not tired of current jobs and have regular breaks during busy weekdays. If company fail to distinguish weekends from weekdays, employees will possibly develop boredom after long-time working. For instance, my best friend who just enters the workplace, at first, she had sufficient enthusiasm and energy towards her job. However, she seldom had weekends due to constant extra work assigned via emails, since her boss always said that brilliant workers should contribute more to the whole company. At last, she cannot bear it but resigned without any reluctance to this job. Thus, it is extremely essential for the employers to provide enough personal space without improper emails during the weekends.

On the other hand, for bidding emails related to work at the weekends greatly facilitate better working achievements of the employees, which can definitely enhance their sense of content. Considering the fierce competition in present society, overwhelming burdens, tasks and numerous problems at work always exhaust people. In this case, offering undisturbed and relaxing holidays to them can let them better recover from the tiredness and become more energetic for the following tasks hence leading to higher possibilities of successful outcomes. With enjoyable working experience and strong sense of achievement, it is hardly for workers to feel bad or unsatisfactory towards their companies. As a result, I believe that companies had better avoid any working emails at the weekends in order to allow their workers to have a better rest.

Given all reasons and examples discussed above, I can safely come to the conclusion that workers will become more satisfied towards the company when they have no interference from the working emails at the weekends.

2019年6月16日托福独立写作解析及参考范文

If you go travelling to a city for the first time, but you only have a limited amount of time, which place you will choose?

1. touring the historic sites

2. going shopping on some markets

3. going to the restaurants or cafe

话题分类：生活

解题思路：选1

主体段1：historic sites可以帮助了解当地文化

主体段2：historic sites包含markets和food stands

参考范文：

As I plan my ideal itinerary to a completely strange city for the first time, the desirable destination within a limited amount of time must be the historic sites instead of various markets for shopping or places for meals and drink.

To begin with, heading for historic attractions prompts tourists to get acclimated to the local customs and traditions rather quickly. To be specific, a visit to a historic site is regarded as a valuable chance to be exposed to fabulous and time-honored buildings, each with specific history attached to it. In other words, such visits expanding individual outlooks on what may be included in school turn out to be a great approach to re-enforce lessons. Many historical places also enable visitors to attain knowledge excluded in textbooks. Moreover, the multi-linguistic services provided by staff members in such attractions remove the language barriers if the destination is an overseas city, coupled with instant response to tourist’ queries about the destination and its people. Walking along the ancient streets with a high concentration of old buildings dating back to centuries ago, tourists are allowed to have a convenient and comfortable visit since hotels and cafes are just a few blocks away.

Another principal reason to support the visit to historic sites is that some of them commonly comprise diverse markets nearby for shopping and meals. Hood River is a typical example of a city integrating historic sites with the shopping district. Historic buildings line the scenic streets of the urban downtown with a bustling shopping district featuring boutiques, designer shops, art galleries and restaurants. Actually, commercial historic districts are abundant in European cities.

To conclude, historic sites rather than shopping markets or restaurants are recommendatory for people who visit a city for the first time but with a limited deal of time.