提升雅思写作逻辑思维方法

马云的成功和他的商业触觉和个人的坚持有很大关系。他在2016年中国财富榜上排名第二，是中国非常成功的商人。他的互联网公司非常成功，富可敌国。他以前只是一个很穷的老师。很多人刚开始都觉得网络是不可能成功的，网络就是分享信息，怎么可能赚钱呢?马云在2001年美国网络泡沫爆炸的时候，融资很难，公司一直在倒闭的边缘。最后，他不断坚持，公司获得资金，一直生存下来。他发现美国的网络购物很盛行，而中国的消费者也会接受网络购物。他的公司在竞争中脱颖而出，收入迅速提升。他自己工作中非常努力，听说公司员工晚上加班到11点是常事。公司在很小的情况下，完成了很多工作，最终成功。

很多人阅读这段话都不会有太大问题，大概清楚里面传递的信息。然而，从雅思作文的角度来说，这段话有很多问题。如果将这段话转化成英文，读者基本上看不懂。现在我们将这段话重新进行梳理。

1. 事情的区分和类似：

整段话事实上说了马云成功的3个因素，包括中心句的商业触觉，个人的坚持，最后两句话描述的勤奋。

事实上，这三个事情是不同的。触觉是天生的敏感，坚持是遇到了挫折继续坚持，而勤奋是不管遇到不遇到挫折，每天都勤奋工作。

2. 事情发生的前后顺序：

这段话描述了四个时间，顺序分别是：先是2016年，然后再说马云的以前，然后说到2001年，最后是公司很小的时候。

这四个时间的顺序并不符合我们的逻辑顺序(也就是从以前到最近)。

3.文章的前后因果关系：

文章中有一句话，说马云以前很穷，很多人觉得网络不可能成功。这两句话是没有逻辑关系的。个人贫穷，不代表网络不可能成功。

我们现在将这段话按照上面这三点进行重新整理(reorganised & logically organised)

每一个观点只讨论和其相关的事情，描述过程中按照时间的发展顺序，句子之前有因果关系：

马云成功的第一要素是：商业触觉。他发现美国的网络购物很盛行，而他推断中国的消费者也会接受网络购物。他的公司因此设计出网络消费的平台，最终在竞争中脱颖而出，公司的收入迅速提升。

马云成功的第二要素是坚持：他以前只是一个很穷的老师。他创业的时候，很多人刚开始都觉得网络是不可能成功的，网络就是分享信息，怎么可能赚钱呢?他虽然资金很少，但是不断坚持。在2001年美国网络泡沫爆炸的时候，融资很难，公司一直在倒闭的边缘。他不断寻找投资者，最终公司获得资金，一直生存下来，并且成功。

马云成功的第三要素是勤奋：他自己工作中非常努力，听说公司员工晚上加班到11点是常事。公司在很小的情况下，完成了很多工作，最终成功。他在2016年中国财富榜上排名第二，是中国非常成功的商人。他的互联网公司非常成功，富可敌国。

假如你写一篇essay，题目是What contributes to the success of an Internet firm?

你将上面的3点一个个写出来，就是很有逻辑的文章:

One factor contributing to the success of Jack Ma’s company is his exceptional business acumen. He noted the prevalence of online shopping in the US as early as 2005 and foresaw the upcoming E-commerce explosion in China. His company thus designed online shopping platforms, which eventually stand out from its competitors and earn considerable profits.

Perseverance is another factor. He used to be an English teacher who scratched a living, and when he set up a business, many people had no confidence in the Internet business’s future in China. He persisted with his course of action, despite having limited seed money. When the dotcom bubble burst in 2001, the company was on the verge of bankruptcy due to the lack of capital. The company secured external funding and survived, because of his ongoing search for investment. It was his persistence that kept the company alive until it could thrive and rise to prominence.

The third factor is the commitment to work. Jack Ma is well-known as a hardworking entrepreneur, and it has been said that employees of his company have beecn accustomed to working until late at night. This explains why the company could achieve more than its competitors when it was small in size. In 2016, he is the second richest man in China, and the wealth created by his business empire can overshadow that of a country.

从上面的例子可以看出，提升雅思作文的逻辑思维要基于：1. 提升阅读的逻辑思维 ;2. 提升信息梳理和整理的逻辑思维。

雅思写作Task2社会类考官范文

Write about the following topic:

In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old peoples where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care.

Who should be responsible for our old people?

Model Answer:

Many old people in Britain, after a lifetime of hard work and the toil of bringing up children, are put into homes for the elderly by their families. There, they are looked after by professional nurses, and this is sometimes at the expense of the government. However, this situation has raised controversy about whether we extend to our elders the care and respect they deserve.

The critics of this system say that it is the duty of the family to look after its senior members in the years when they are no longer able to work. They point out that in retirement homes old people tend to feel useless and unwanted by their family members, who seldom come to see them. In addition, there is evidence that younger people benefit from the experience and wisdom of older people who live with them on a daily basis.

On the other had, those who support the system say that retired parents can be a burden to young families. Not only is it expensive to support old people who have little or no income, but the fact that old people are often ill and need a great deal of looking after can be too much for their busy children.

In my opinion, neither side is completely right. Old people in good health and with enough finances to support themselves can be a great help to their children. For instance, they can look after their grandchildren while children are out at work. On the other had, sick and penniless old people are better off being looked after in retirement homes at government expense.

雅思写作Task2社会类考官范文

Write about the following topic:

Children who are brought up in the family that do not have a lot of money are better prepared to deal with problems when they become adults than children who are brought up by wealthy parent.

Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Model Answer:

Over the past few decades, along with growing interest in child education, people's attention to the family environment where a child is brought up has also significantly increased. Some people have begun to feel that a child who has grown up in a poor family tend to be better prepared to deal with problems. In my opinion, however, family environment alone does not much influence a child's ability to solve problems.

A child who was born into a poor family would have had more situations where they had to solve a problem or make a decision on their own. This is because in most unfortunate families, both parents are usually working and children are put into situations where they have to take care of themselves. By contrast, due to their wealth, rich children can experience and learn things that unfortunate children cannot. For example, they usually go to the best schools and receive a higher education there, which prepares them better for solving problems in their life.

However, few would disagree with the fact that each individual is different. That is, problem solving skills come more from life experience. That is, the more a person experiences in life, the more they can use these experiences to adjust, to adapt and to solve problems they encounter. Personality also can be a factor in dealing with problems. A person who is optimistic, outgoing, confident and open-minded can look at and solve problems more effectively.

As discussed above, nature and nurture have an equal influence on a child's ability to face challenges. Parents should spare no effort to figure out how they can help their children to be independent. I hope that in the future the next generation will grow up as mature citizens.

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