2020雅思口语批改问题

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雅思口语问题：描述过于抽象

雅思口语话题：和陌生人的有趣谈话。

雅思口语原文：I’d like to share a funny story with you. When I was about 10 years old, you know, a boy full of energy and never in a peaceful mind, I was running around freely in a city park.

这位考生将“一次谈话”和“一个有趣的外国人”两个话题结合起来了，这个本身并没有问题，但是问题感觉干巴巴的，开头段介绍事情发生的时间地点人物。但是时间介绍上(when I was about 10 years old)太过于抽象，所以我加上了一句 it took place。并在I was running…前面加上one day来合理细化时间。you know, a boy full of energy and never in a peaceful mind此句显得多余，可以删去。

雅思口语批改：I’d like to share a funny story with you. It took place when I was about 10 years old. One day as I was jogging in a city park,

雅思口语问题：语序逻辑问题

雅思口语原文：Suddenly on the corner ,I nearly bumped into a middle-aged man who is a medium-built foreigner around 5.3 feet, a little fat but with sparkling eyes which is so beautiful and attractive that I couldn’t help looking so much. I stopped and said sorry to him sincerely. Fortunately He was not irritable and said it’s ok.

这段介绍事情的起因。因为在跑步的过程中遇到了外国人，顺便对其外貌进行了描述。很明显在几乎要撞上对方的时候是来不及看清对方长相的，所以此处直接用定语从句描述外貌不恰当。按照真实的事件发展，先撞上人，然后马上道歉，在对话过程中间看清楚对方的长相。同时，这位同学犯了一个错误，在过去时态里介绍外貌用了现在时。这样会产生误导。

雅思口语批改：One day as I was running around freely in a city park,I nearly bumped right into a man at a corner. Not until he apologized in poor Chinese did I realize he was a foreigner! To tell you the truth the guy was actually good-looking. He was about 5.3 feet tall, a little fat but blue eyes sparkled with charisma, which really appealed to me.

雅思口语问题：冗余赘述，逻辑连接词乱用

雅思口语原文：At the moment I found that there were about seven dogs frolicking around him, they seemed to be cute corgis then I asked him what was he doing with them?

接着注意到了外国人身边有七条柯基犬，(found改为noticed更为准确，seemed to be也显多余，可以直接删除)，于是有了这段对话。

此处要注意逻辑关系，看到小狗后才想起问他在干嘛，是因果关系，所以then改为so。宾语从句需要使用陈述句语序，后面也无需加问号

雅思口语批改：At the moment I noticed that there were about seven corgi puppies frolicking around him. So I asked him what he was doing.

雅思口语问题：指代不明

He responded that he was just racing with his small pets and the first one would be given the name Gabriel the same as his and the rest would be named from number one to six.

first one 指代不明，改成winner of the game会明确很多。

雅思口语批改：He responded that he was just racing with his puppies and the winner of the game would be named Gabriel -- just the same as his and the rest would be named from one to six.

雅思口语问题：中式表达

That was so funny I never heard before. I said how did he come up with this idea? He said he had no idea but it occurred to him suddenly when he saw children running around. Oh maybe I made some contributions for him. Finally, I said goodbye to him and wished him a good ending.

这一段用于描述自己的反应和感受,但是表达过于中式。第一句话是个病句，可以更改成 It was so funny that I was cracked up. 后面进一步加强，I even started to wonder how he came up with the idea. 然后外国人解释，he told me he had a tough time figuring out how to name the dogs till he saw some kids running around in this park one day.

雅思口语批改：It was so funny that I was cracked up. A bit confused, the foreigner, however, went on to explain that he had a tough time figuring out how to name the dogs till he saw some kids running around in this park one day. I have to say it was a brilliant yet quite novel idea. Don’t you think so?

2020年9-12月雅思口语part1答案解析：Concentration

1. When do you need to be focused?

Usually I need to concentrate and be focused when I am doing homework. Some people can study when there is a lot of noise around them, but I can’t, I have to be in complete silence. I must be in a place where there is no music, no household noise, no people talking… total silence. Maybe I am not good at concentrating and I get distracted too easily… but that’s just the way I am. It’s my personality.

2. What may distract you when you are trying to stay focused?

When I am trying to stay focused I can get easily distracted by many things. Firstly, my own thoughts start to wander off, and I suddenly realise I am staring out of the window thinking about something completely different and not focusing on my studies. Sometimes if I hear music or my parents or friends talking outside the room I start to lose my concentration. Things like that.

3. What do you do to help you concentrate?

I put on noise-cancelling headphones - you know, those kind of headphones that play music but do not allow other external sounds to enter your ears! I put on light classical music, and I make sure I shut the door and I tell my friends and family that I need to study in peace.

4. Is it difficult for you to stay focused on something?

Yes, I’ve got a poor concentration span. Well, a lot of the time, anyway. There are times when I can focus really well - when I’ve had a good night’s sleep, or when I am feeling calm and confident. But if I am stressed or nervous, I find it hard to concentrate on things and I am easily distracted.

2020年9-12月雅思口语part2&3答案解析：精力充沛的人

Describe a person who is full of energy.

You should say:

Who he or she is

What he or she does

Why he or she is full of energy

And explain how you feel about this person

The person I’d like to describe who is full of energy is my friend, Mary. She’s incredible, actually. I honestly don’t know how she has so much energy and manages to do so much with her energy too, and not waste it. As one example, she always gets up early, goes for a run for an hour, comes home and showers, gets changed, and then has breakfast and then starts to study. After that she always reads, cooks wonderful food, goes out to parties and a lot of social events in the evenings, and seems to have some time to do all sorts of little hobbies in the meantime. I have often wondered how she can remain so focused, so active and manage to fit so many things into one day. I think she must be very healthy, have strong genes, and also perhaps a great sense of confidence, positivity and motivation, too. I feel great when I am with Mary, because she is always encouraging me to join in new experiences and learn new things, but at the same time I feel quite tired in her company. She never seems to get tired or run out of energy and she’s always talking. She’s so talkative. I think some people naturally have a thirst for experiences and a strong appetite for life, and Mary is most certainly one of those people. I feel energized, myself, when I’m in her company, but also she makes me feel that I am a bit lazy, a bit laid-back and perhaps don’t have much get-up-and-go compared to her, so at times I feel a bit inferior, like something is wrong with me. In a way I’d like to be like Mary, but in a way I also don’t think I could cope with having such a busy life and maintaining such positivity whilst juggling so many different hobbies, activities, studies and social engagements. I’m the type of person that needs more free time alone relaxing and just not thinking that much, or doing so much in my free time. I guess we are all different! But at times these kinds of energetic and active people can be a motivating influence to us all!

Part3

1. What kind of jobs require much energy?

Lots of jobs require a lot of energy, in different ways. For example, manual jobs require a lot of physical energy, stamina and endurance, whilst mental jobs like being a lawyer, a CEO or a CFO, require a different kind of energy – you need to have a sharp and fast-thinking mind. So, there are different types of energy required for different kinds of jobs and they are all tiring in their own different ways. Sometimes, for example, doing some physical manual work can be tiring on the body, but oddly relaxing on the mind. And the opposite is true of a lot of mentally-tiring jobs, you get exhausted from thinking so much and thinking of so many things at the same time, but your body doesn’t get enough exercise. There are pros and cons of all jobs really.

2. Do you think manual work will all be done by machines in the future?

I think most manual work will be done by machines in the future, but this also has some significant downsides. This has been discussed a lot recently as so much factory work, as an example, is done by machines, robots, basically, and this has resulted in less and less jobs being available to lower-skilled workers who rely on such manual jobs as their main source of income. So, I would not really like to see so many manual jobs being taken over by robots, because this means a lot of people will lose their jobs, and if they don’t have other skills, they may find it incredibly difficult to find work. These are some of the key issues that arise from modernization – issues that governments all over the world are needing to address today, as automation in the workforce is becoming so predominant.

3. Do you think manual workers will earn more in the future?

I am not sure. I don’t really understand that much about economics and the workforce really, but I’d guess that they will because the more scarce a job is, usually the better paid it becomes. So, say, for example, certain types of factory jobs, perhaps more skilled manual labour, become more scarce, then those that can do those jobs might end up getting paid more. I’m not entirely sure if it works like this, so it’s really hard for me to say. My friend, who studies, economics, is really into this topic, actually. He has studied a lot about GDP, and wage gaps, and pay rates and things like this because he aims to be an employment lawyer in the future as well as an economist. I often listen to him talking about these topics, but then I get lost because it’s such a complex thing, and there are so manty factors involved in the economy and workforce of a country, that I don’t have enough knowledge of the subject area to understand it properly.

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