考研英语作文：疯狂背诵30篇（12）

考研英语作文：疯狂背诵30篇（12）

Directions 12

Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the picture,
2. interpret their meaning, and
3. make your comment on this phenomenon.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

审题：

这篇文章配的图很简单，而意义却是深刻的。提纲的第二部分和第三部分分别是阐释含义和做出评论，我们可以分成三块来写：提出问题——从两方面分析——下结论。这样文章包含开始描述图画的部分就有了四个部分。
笔记本电脑可以写作laptop computer, portable computer, notebook computer, notebook PC，在文中应替换使用。

Sample:

In the above picture a university student is phoning his mother, “In order to make progress in my study, I want to buy a laptop computer.”
Is a laptop computer indispensable? Does a laptop computer mean greater possibility of academic excellence? Does a student without a laptop computer have no chance of success? It is obvious that the drawer wants all of us to think deeply before providing the answer. To reach a reasonable conclusion, we should analyze this problem from two perspectives.

On the one hand, we cannot guarantee that the student will use the portable computer solely for studyrelated purposes. Most of them have not lived independently, so they do not know how hard it is to make a living. Once they have the computer at hand, those students who lack selfcontrol may be indulged in computer games or online chatting, which will waste their time and affect their health.

On the other hand, a student without a notebook computer can also be a top student. Sometimes students do need computers to finish assignments, and the computer rooms on campus can often meet that purpose. For those students whose majors call for frequent use of computers, they also can buy the desktop one, which is much cheaper.

After careful consideration, we should say that the luxurious learning equipment such as a laptop computer is not necessary unless the parents can easily afford it and the student uses it only to facilitate his work and study.

点评：

大家可能会问：出题人是让我们就题论题写笔记本电脑呢，还是推衍开去泛泛而论这样的奢侈类学习用品呢？在这里我们写成两种情形都是可以的，范文中是先就笔记本电脑展开提问和思索，最后做结时用了“诸如笔记本电脑的奢侈型学习用品”的字眼。
文章共分五段。第一段描述图画，非常简洁。第二段连问了三个问题：笔记本电脑必不可少吗？它一定会推动学业进步吗？没有就学不好吗？第一个问题是核心，包含了后面两个问题。之后的两句话是过渡句，起承上启下的作用。第三段和第四段分别回答上面的后两个问题，均得到了否定的答案。而最后一段下结论直接呼应了第一个问题——说明笔记本电脑不是必需的，只有同时符合两个条件时，笔记本电脑才是有益的。

心得：

第二段的连续提问很有震撼力——为了能在考试中运用出丰富多彩的语言表达方式，平时多积累、多练习是很关键的。
第三段是写有了手提电脑后不一定会学习。下面分两句来写，先写原因，后写结果。由于不知道赚钱的艰辛，所以缺乏自制力的学生很可能沉迷于电脑游戏或网络聊天。
第四段写没有手提电脑也可以成为优等生。的确需要电脑时，可以去机房。个别确实需要常用电脑的学生，可以购买便宜得多的台式机。
最后一段非常精彩，说只有两个条件齐备，象手提电脑这样的学习用品才能发挥作用。这两个条件就是家庭承受得起和学生将之用于学习与工作的目的。
文章中有许多优秀的词组与句型，下面以第三段为例，希望大家用心识记。该段第一句中的guarantee表示“保证”，use...solely for studyrelated purposes表示“只用于学习相关的目的”，是个很地道的表达方式。第二句比较难以表达，如果这样写就不严谨：They have not earned money, so they do not know how hard it is to make a living.建议改作范文中的写法，或者：Most of them have not lived on their own, so they do not know how hard it is to earn money.
写作中的推敲琢磨很重要，我们一边学习、模仿别人的文章，磨砺、比较自己的写法，这样就一定能获得进步。第三句使用了once引导的时间状语从句，使得时间接续非常紧密，而后使用at hand表示“得到”，非常精妙，远胜于普通的写法：Once they have bought the computer, ...句中使用定语从句who lack selfcontrol是严谨的写法，因为并不是所有的学生都会沉湎于坏习惯中。后面的be indulged in表示“沉湎于”，句子最后使用了非限制性定语从句，分两个方面说明危害。